Robert McKee is the author of Story , a wonderful text for writers. He is highly regarded for his $450 seminars and ability to explain the “magic” of story construction. He says, “Never include anything the audience can reasonably and easily assume has happened.”
This has never been more true, because today’s readers want to drive rapidly forward with the action. Redundancies and stating the obvious is like being asked to stop for gas when the tank is almost full.
Here are some redundant expressions that could be better stated in a single word.
● Very unique
● Nodded his head
● Advance warning
● Fiction novel
● Safe haven
● Close proximity
● Whispered softly
● Plan ahead
● Descended down
● Climbed up
● Added bonus
● Freezing cold
● Little baby
● Screamed loudly
● Bounced up and down
● Waved his hand
Here are some obvious in-between steps that should be left out.
● He reached over and helped her to her feet.
● Sam stood up and walked over to greet his friend.
● I leaned down and kissed her on the cheek.
● Valerie hustled her through the door, into the crowded living room and into a political discussion.
● They raised their hands and locked them their hands behind their heads.
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